New song ( idea) workin in progres

[Riff_Lovely]

Helo Guys
words for those who do not yet know Croatian:
( Google translate so somewhere the meaning is lost, but you will understand)

Yes, sometimes it happens
For a flower to sprout from the rock
For rain to fall out of the clear blue
sky
Yes, sometimes it happens
That the moon darkens the sun
For the king to bow to the court madwoman

But never
May our paths cross
For my boot to fit in front of yours

I dress like a king for you
And I wear a smile as if drawn
Because you might be there somewhere
Maybe it's that day.

Yes, sometimes it happens
For the sea to disappear
To move the mountain
Yes, sometimes it happens

[mklankin@hotmail.com]

Hey Riff,

Another solid song idea here!

First off, I like the groove of the track, very cool and great guitar interplay - certain parts remind me of early Rolling Stones. Guitar sounds are nicely breaking up & spanky, too. Lyrics are solid.

I know this is work-in-progress so here are some suggestions to consider:

1 - the backing vocals (“ahhhh”, around 1:05, 2:37, 3:41): just mind your pitch as seems to be some flatness going on. You may also want to consider adding keys support (or replacing vox with) depending if additional instrumentation is desired
2 - when the intro comes back at 1:33, consider cutting it and the following verse (I’m guessing) in half
3 - love the pre-lead starting at 3:05, it would be super (if that part was redone) if you could get some guitar feedback going to raise the energy & set-up the subsequent lead (which is great)
4 - I like how the track ends, but between the lead and end, maybe shorten that outro by half

Only sharing things I hear, certainly take or leave ‘em.

I’m looking forward to see how this song shapes up so please share the finished version when it’s ready!

Take care,
Michael

[Riff_Lovely]

Hi Michael. Thanks for listening. I will certainly correct something. I recorded 6-7 songs in a couple of days. That and what I recorded had to cover myself, because those were guitars from one or two attempts. the guitar solo is from the head, some kind of jamming. I will finish the rest of the songs before presenting them. I will try backing vocals through Sytronic ( Uhh, ahh ).
I'm thinking of seeing how it would be to have an AI sing me like Plant or Morrison .
Thanks for the constructive criticism. Keep on rockin

[danwilson5]

Hey Riff Lovely,

Nice song. Looking forward to some of the other 6 songs you wrote.

Dan

[CrazySchmidt]

God dang!! I love your riffing dude!!

Classic hard rocking schit!

Cheers, CS.